ext_6741 ([identity profile] persephone-kore.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] persephone_kore 2004-07-14 04:18 pm (UTC)

The only critique I would offer is that the last paragraph felt as though the story were continuing.

Er, well, there's a reason for that. I probably should have put in a note to the effect that I wasn't done. Glad you like it so far, though!

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