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Pick a paragraph (or any passage less than 500 words) from any fanfic I've written, and comment to this post with that selection. I will then give you a DVD commentary on that snippet: what I was thinking when I wrote it, why I wrote it in the first place, what's going on in the character's heads, why I chose certain words, what this moment means in the context of the rest of the fic, lots of awful puns, and anything else that you'd expect to find on a DVD commentary track.

--Actually, I don't watch that many DVD commentaries, so who knows what you'll actually get. *g*

Minor Rescue

Date: 2012-09-27 11:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] khilari.livejournal.com
"Let him go." A woman's icy voice cut through the older man's growled threats and Loki's latest effort at sniping back. He got a look at her and determined that he had no idea who she was.

"But--"

"Just leave him to me."

Much to Loki's surprise, the man obeyed almost as fast as when Thor had come to the rescue. To his further surprise, Ikol -- who had not been much use in the preceding confrontation, but had at least hung around -- gave a sudden squawk and flapped away.

Loki rubbed his neck and looked at the woman warily. She could have her own cause and plans for vengeance; that might explain both the departures. "Thank you," he said, since whatever she might be planning, at the moment nobody was trying to choke him. "Ah... I assume I knew you before, but I'm afraid I don't now."

"Sigyn," she said, and handed him a bowl. Loki blinked. There was soup in it. "I don't know what you were up to when you didn't turn up for dinner, but I thought you might like something to eat."

"Ah." Loki's stomach growled. A little bewildered, he sat down with the soup on a broken stair. Sigyn sat beside him. He sniffed the soup tentatively. None of them could really be poisoned, but it could still have something nasty in it. Smelled good, though. "So, my previous self was, to you....?" he prompted, lifting the bowl to his lips.

"My husband," she said, and Loki nearly inhaled a mouthful of soup.

"Well," he wheezed, "I may not be ready for that sort of commitment yet this time around."

She laughed. "You might be a little young for me right now, yes."

"Was I... was he... ah, was he good to you?"

"Fairly obnoxious, actually. He killed and impersonated the man I'd meant to marry. Then, once he had me, he didn't seem to be able to stand me."

"Oh." Loki sighed a little. After everything else he'd found out, he wasn't exactly surprised. "Sorry about that. Um, wouldn't it have made more sense to divorce him? Or wouldn't he go along with it?"

Sigyn smirked. "He claimed we had. But I... I never seemed to be quite able to let go. Now that we know we were living in cycles, I suspect I did something rash and binding in a previous one where we got along better, and it carried over." She stretched her legs out, crossed at the ankles, and added in a tone Loki knew in his own throat, "And it did drive him up the wall that I insisted."

"You've been picking up slang from Midgard," Loki observed. "But in that case, why are you being nice to me?"

Sigyn ruffled his hair. Loki ducked aside to the point that he actually fell over, though he managed not to spill the soup. "A chance to get away with that," she said. "And somebody has to be."

Re: Minor Rescue

Date: 2012-10-01 09:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] persephone-kore.livejournal.com
One of the main things I remember thinking about in relation to this story, although it's more background than content, is that Asgard's treatment of kid!Loki is a terrible idea. It's... somewhat understandable, and maybe more so than I initially considered it. They've recently been through Ragnarok followed by a variety of other horrors many of which were his deliberate doing. Still, they are generally not trying to do anything definitive -- arguably they can't, since he might just come back to life again, and mostly the people who knock him around aren't aware of his current schemes let alone in a position to interfere with them. (I think I actually wrote this before the Christmas/Yuletide issue where the other kids in Asgard were punching him.) Their resentment is valid but they're taking it out on somebody who either doesn't remember causing it... or, if they're assuming it's all a trick, who is probably going to add it to a list of grudges.

The other thing I was thinking was that it would be nice to address Sigyn somewhere along the way. Which the comics didn't appear to be planning.

I think Ikol fled in this because he was worried about being recognized, or just didn't want to deal with her.

The soup was mostly to have an excuse for her to show up with a bowl.

None of them could really be poisoned, but it could still have something nasty in it. -- MarvelComics!Aesir (Loki included) are basically impossible to poison and immune to disease (unless, presumably, somebody decides to ignore this for their plot). This is played with when bodysnatcher!Loki is meeting with Doom and remarks cheerfully on the food being poisoned. I'm not sure, come to think of it, if there are ever said to be special god-level poisons. If nothing else you'd think Sigyn of all people could get hold of snake venom. :P But mostly Loki's thinking of spit or bodily waste, which given the immunity to disease would mostly just be a gross-out factor.

"Well," he wheezed, "I may not be ready for that sort of commitment yet this time around."

She laughed. "You might be a little young for me right now, yes."
-- I'm fond of these lines for some reason. Kid!Loki is right around puberty/early teens according to Gillen.

"He claimed we had. But I... I never seemed to be quite able to let go. Now that we know we were living in cycles, I suspect I did something rash and binding in a previous one where we got along better, and it carried over." She stretched her legs out, crossed at the ankles, and added in a tone Loki knew in his own throat, "And it did drive him up the wall that I insisted." -- Loki and Sigyn's relationship in Marvel Comics is... weird and generally troubling, and that's when they remember she exists. This is my random little "What is going on here?" explanation, although I'm not sure it really helps. Sometime, somewhere, their relationship made sense at least to them, and she never got over it. Also, she trolls him a lot. (I don't think the writers meant this to be happening, but the scenes where she's being gooey at him and he hates it are entertaining to read that way.) I'm not sure I'm happy with the line about "a tone Loki knew in his own throat," though. The phrasing feels wrong when I reread it, doesn't seem to fit the rest of the story very well.

Date: 2012-09-28 01:42 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dreagoddess.livejournal.com
What a fun idea! I'd play along but, um, I wrote most of your fics with you or got in-process commentary, so I know what you were thinking. ;)

Date: 2012-09-28 02:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] persephone-kore.livejournal.com
*laughing* I think I'll pick something of yours anyway....

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